Young people prefer to spend their leisure time in shopping centres, sports or music.

Practice this IELTS Writing Task 2 question on IELTSX. Young people prefer to spend their leisure time in shopping centres, sports or music.

Young people spending leisure time in shopping centres sports or music - IELTS Writing Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Is this a positive or negative development?

Write at least 250 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 7 ยท 295 words.

Nowdays, many young people choose to spend their free time in shopping centres, listening to music or playing sports instead of staying at home. While some people beleive that spending time in shopping centres can encourage unnecessary spending, I beleive that this is generally a positive development because these activities help young people relax and improve their physical and mental well-being. One of the main reasons why I consider this trend positive is that sports and music have many benefits for young people. Playing sports helps them stay fit, reduce stress, and develop important skills snch as teamwork and discipline. Similarly, listening to music allows teenagers to relax after a busy day at school and improves their mood. As a result, they become healthier and more motivated in both their studies and personal lives. For example, many students who regulary exercise achieve better academic results because they are more enegetic and focused. Another reason is that shopping centres are not only places to buy things but also places where people can socialise. Many shopping malls include cinemas, cafes, and entertainment areas where friends and families can spend quality time together. This helps people improve their communication skills and build stronger relationships. Although some teenagers may waste money on unnecessary products, this problem can be solved if parents teach them how to manage their finances responsibility. Therefore, the advantages of spending time to shopping centres are greater than the disadvantages. In conclusion, I beleive that young people spending their time leisure time on spots, music, and visiting shopping centres is a positive development. These activities improve both physical and mental health, provide opportunities to socialise, and help young people enjoy a balanced lifestyle. However, they should always use their free time wisely and avoid excesive spending.

Examiner feedback

The essay successfully addresses the prompt by clearly presenting a balanced view and supporting position regarding how young people spend their leisure time. While it demonstrates good organization, appropriate vocabulary, and varied sentence structures, occasional spelling errors and minor grammatical slips prevent it from reaching a higher band score.

Task Response - 7

- Addresses all parts of the task by discussing the trend of young people spending leisure time on shopping, sports, and music, and presenting a clear position. - Presents, extends, and supports main ideas with relevant examples regarding health, socialisation, and skill development. - Position is maintained throughout the response, though some supporting ideas could be slightly more deeply explored.

Coherence & Cohesion - 7

- Logically organises information with clear progression through introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. - Uses a range of cohesive devices such as "while", "similarly", "as a result", and "another reason" appropriately. - Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph, though referencing and transitions could be slightly more sophisticated.

Lexical Resource - 7

- Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow flexibility and precision with terms like "well-being", "socialise", and "communication skills". - Attempts less common lexical items with general awareness of style and collocation. - Contains minor spelling and word formation errors like "snch" instead of "such" and "responsibility" instead of "responsibly".

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 7

- Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms effectively to convey ideas. - Makes occasional spelling and typographical errors such as "Nowdays" and "beleive", alongside slight prepositions misuse ("time to shopping centres"). - Maintains generally good control of grammar and punctuation with rare instances of error.

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