Crime rates will fall as advances in technology make it easier to detect and prevent crimes.

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Crime rates fall advances technology make easier detect prevent crimes - IELTS Writing Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write at least 250 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 6 ยท 250 words.

It is thought that the level of crime rates will decrease dramatically as technology in present days mitigate the ways of detecting criminals. Although , the technology could discover criminal actions , I believe that enhance opportunities for criminals to cerate new types of crime.

To begin with , with advanced technology , there is high chance to find offender as quickly as possible . There are special cameras with facial recognition that available in public places that could find any person immediately. For example, in the UK many robbery and assult cases are solved using facial recognition from public cameras . Furthermore ,due to IT , cybercrime could be easily detected. Banks use AI systems to detect unusual transactions. For instance , if someone tries to transfer a large amount of money from a foreign country , the system blocks it automatically. Additionally , such companies as Google and Facebook use algoritms to detect hacking attempts.

However , offenders create more and more fake platforms , websites or even emails with VPN to hide their identities that are common nowadays. For example , hackers steal data from companies with thousands of users and aim to blackmail them. In addition , social crimes such as domestic violence and street fight are still exist , regardless of technology.

In conclusion , with regard to technology there are certain types of crime which level are decreased , however due to progress in digital era criminals create new ways to commit a crime.

Examiner feedback

The essay provides a balanced view of the prompt, successfully identifying how technology both prevents and facilitates crime. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to improve grammatical accuracy and use more sophisticated, natural-sounding vocabulary.

Task Response - 6

- All parts of the task are addressed, though the student shifts the focus slightly toward how technology also creates new crimes. - A clear position is maintained throughout, concluding that technology is a double-edged sword. - Main ideas are relevant and supported with specific examples (UK cameras, Google/Facebook), though some points lack depth.

Coherence & Cohesion - 6

- Information is organized with a clear overall progression from the advantages of technology to its limitations. - Cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'However' are used effectively but somewhat mechanically. - Paragraphing is logical, though the conclusion is slightly brief and repetitive.

Lexical Resource - 6

- An adequate range of vocabulary is used for the task (e.g., 'facial recognition', 'unusual transactions', 'blackmail'). - Some errors in word choice and collocation are evident (e.g., 'mitigate the ways', 'enhance opportunities for criminals'). - Spelling is generally accurate, but some word formations are awkward.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 6

- A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used, including conditional 'if' clauses and relative clauses. - Frequent minor errors occur, such as missing auxiliary verbs ('that available') and subject-verb agreement ('street fight are still exist'). - Punctuation errors are present, specifically the habit of putting spaces before commas.

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