Many people think cheap air travel should be encouraged because it gives ordinary people freedom to travel further. However, other think this leads to environmental problem, so air travel should be more expensive in order to discourage people from having it.

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Cheap air travel freedom to travel further or environmental problem - IELTS Writing Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Write at least 250 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 6 · 331 words.

It is widely believed that air travelling ought to be cheap, contributing a more chance for ordinary people to travel overseas while a group of people think that it can give a rise to environmental issues, Therefore, travelling via air should be more costly to reduce its negative implications for the environment. It is undeniable fact that travelling can lead to serious damages for the nature, but it seems to me, people with low-income have the right to travel abroad to take a short break from their daily life.

On the one hand, there is a widespread belief among society that having considered that tourism can have several detrimental effects for the environment to some extent, leading to severe issues for the host country, some people have a strong notion that air travelling should be more expensive to reduce the number of toursits visiting foriegn countries. To clarifty, in most cases, tourists are less likely to pay attention to conserve the nature around them, throwing away their trash everywhere, which can result in waste pollution. Moreover, air pollution can be largely attributed by travelling by plane. The amount of hazardous gases emitted by plane is far more than that of other transport means, deteriorating significantly the quality of the air.

On the other hand, if the cost of air travelling are affordable, it would be great opportunity for those with shortage of funds to travel overseas. There are a great deal of people who live paycheck to paycheck, they never even dream about travelling another country to have a pleasure due to the huge costs of air travelling. As a result, they cannot travel anywhere to unwind. Having said that this phenomenon can impact for their general emotional well-being. H the cost of travelling by air should be reduced to some respects.

In conclusion, it is the fact that air travelling can lead to certain environmental issues, in terms of access for ordinary people, it should be affordable in some cases.

Examiner feedback

The essay addresses both sides of the argument and maintains a consistent position. To improve the score, the candidate needs to reduce grammatical slips and ensure that the supporting evidence for each argument is directly relevant to the specific impact of aviation rather than general tourism.

Task Response - 6

- All parts of the task are addressed, and a clear position is expressed in the introduction and conclusion. - Main ideas are relevant, but some supporting points lack focus, such as the leap from air travel to tourists throwing trash on the ground. - The argument regarding low-income travelers is clear but could be more fully developed with specific examples.

Coherence & Cohesion - 6

- Information is organized logically with a clear progression from introduction to body paragraphs. - Cohesive devices are used (On the one hand, Moreover, In conclusion) but some transitions like "Having said that" are used inaccurately. - Paragraphing is used sufficiently, with each paragraph containing a central topic.

Lexical Resource - 6

- The vocabulary range is adequate for the task, including phrases like "detrimental effects" and "hazardous gases." - Some word choice errors and spelling mistakes occur (e.g., "foriegn", "toursits", "clarifty", "travelling another country"). - Collocations are occasionally unnatural (e.g., "contributing a more chance", "give a rise to").

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 6

- A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is attempted, though accuracy varies. - Several grammatical errors occur (e.g., subject-verb agreement: "if the cost... are affordable", "impact for their"). - Punctuation errors are present, specifically comma splices and incorrect capitalization after commas (e.g., "issues, Therefore").

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