The following pie charts show the use of social media by men and women in Australia in 2011 and 2014.

Social Media Use Men Women Australia 2011 2014 Pie Chart - IELTS Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 6.5 · 201 words.

The pie charts illustrate how often social media was used by males and females in Australia in 2011 and 2014. Overall, the uasge of social media at the initiating period was not wide - spread as in 2014 among both genders and the propotions changed significantly over the course of 3 years.

In 2011, number of men using social media on a daily basis comprised a quater, experiencing a considerable increase at 45% at the ending period. Similarly, women made up 30% at the starting period and had a bigger proportional growth than men in 2014 reaching almost three fifth. Males tendency to use social networks once a week barely changed over time with respective figures of 12% and 9%. Conversely, the most striking change was observed in women, whose usage once a week significantly dropped from nearly 40% to only one in ten.

Men who used social platforms few times a week accounted for 19% in 2011 and 16% at the ending period, with women standing at 22% and 9% respectively. Number of men who never used social media decreased from approximately 44% to just below one third. In contrast, that of women encountered major growth from 8% to 22%.

Examiner feedback

The response demonstrates a strong ability to categorize data and identify major trends, particularly the shift toward daily usage. To improve, the writer should focus on grammatical precision regarding articles and possessives, and ensure spelling accuracy throughout the text.

Task Achievement - 7

- The response covers the requirements of the task and provides a clear overview of the main trends. - Key features are highlighted, including the significant increase in daily usage for both genders. - Data is generally accurate, although some minor details like the exact proportions for 'never' users are slightly misinterpreted from the charts.

Coherence & Cohesion - 7

- Information is organized logically, following specific categories of usage frequency. - Cohesive devices like 'Similarly', 'Conversely', and 'In contrast' are used effectively to signal comparisons. - Paragraphing is appropriate, though the transition between gender-specific data could be smoother.

Lexical Resource - 6

- Good range of vocabulary used to describe proportions, such as 'a quarter', 'three fifth', and 'one in ten'. - Some spelling errors are present ('uasge', 'propotions'). - Natural collocations are used, such as 'daily basis' and 'most striking change', though 'initiating period' is slightly unnatural.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 6

- A variety of complex structures is attempted, such as 'whose usage... significantly dropped'. - There are several grammatical errors, such as 'number of men' (missing 'the') and 'Males tendency' (missing possessive apostrophe). - Punctuation is generally well-controlled, but minor errors in article usage and pluralization persist.

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