The line graph provides information about the number of visitors to four different museums from 1980 to 2015.

Number Visitors Louvre Vatican London Science Shenzhen Museums 1980-2015 - IELTS Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 6 · 167 words.

The line graph compares information about visitors to four different museums between 1980 and 2015. Overall, while the number of visitors in the Louvre and Vatican museums increased, the figures for the London science museum decreased. In contrast, There was fluctuation in the figures for the Shenzhen museum.

Looking first at the Louvre and Vatican museums, they saw a noticeable rise during this period. In 1980, the figure for the Louvre was approximately 8 million, and it increased by more than 1 million and reached a peak in 1995, before going down to just above 8 million. Similarly, visitors to the Vatican museums increased, although at a faster rate, and reached a high point with just above 9 million.

As for the London Science and Shenzhen museums, they showed different patterns. London science museum decreased significantly by almost 2 million from around 4 million to 2 million. However, the number of visitors to the Shenzhen fluctuated around 3 million, and it surpassed London science museum in 2000.

Examiner feedback

This is a solid Band 6.0 response. It clearly communicates the main trends and supports them with data. To improve, work on a more comprehensive overview and focus on the accuracy of articles and more varied vocabulary for describing data movements.

Task Achievement - 6

- The response covers the main trends and identifies key features such as peaks and intersections. - An overview is provided, though it misses the fact that the Vatican museum eventually became the most popular. - Data is used to support the description, but some key figures are approximated vaguely (e.g., 'just above 9 million').

Coherence & Cohesion - 6

- The information is organized logically by grouping museums with similar trends (upward vs. downward/fluctuating). - Cohesive devices are used appropriately, though some transitions like 'As for' and 'Looking first at' are a bit mechanical. - Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate the overview from the detail.

Lexical Resource - 6

- The vocabulary is generally adequate for describing trends (e.g., 'noticeable rise', 'fluctuated', 'surpassed'). - There is some repetition of 'the figure for' and 'increased'. - Meaning is clear, though the word choice is somewhat restricted to basic reporting.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 6

- A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used, but there are errors in article usage (e.g., 'the Shenzhen', 'London science museum'). - Tense usage is generally correct for the time period (past tense). - Punctuation is mostly accurate, though there is an unnecessary capitalization after 'In contrast'.

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