The charts show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B.

Male Female Workers Percentage Country A Country B Chart - IELTS Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

A student's answer to this task, and the feedback on it

Written by an IELTSX user under exam conditions and published unedited and anonymously. Band 9 · 179 words.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of male and female workers in three employment sectors across two different countries.

Overall, what stands out from the charts is that the service sector is the primary source of employment in both nations. Meanwhile, agriculture represents the second largest sector in Country A, whereas industry holds this position in Country B.

In Country A, over half of the male workforce and roughly 50% of females are employed in the service sector. Although the industrial sector accounts for 15% of men and 8% of women, agriculture remains the second most dominant field, employing nearly a third of males and 43% of females

In Country B, a mere 4% of the total workforce is involved in agriculture, with figures for males and females standing at 3% and 1% respectively. In addition, nearly a third (32%) of men are employed in industry, whereas only 11% of women work in this field. By contrast, the service sector is the most significant employer, accounting for roughly 90% of female workers and approximately two-thirds of the male population.

Examiner feedback

This is an exceptional response that demonstrates all the hallmarks of a Band 9.0 performance. It provides a clear overview, selects the most relevant data for comparison, and uses highly sophisticated language and grammar with total accuracy.

Task Achievement - 9

- The response covers all requirements of the task fully, with a clear and effective overview identifying the primary employment sector and key differences between the countries. - Key features are expertly selected and illustrated with accurate data, highlighting the contrast between the agrarian nature of Country A and the industrial/service nature of Country B. - Information is presented logically without unnecessary detail, maintaining a sharp focus on the comparison of sectors and genders.

Coherence & Cohesion - 9

- Paragraphing is skillfully managed, with a logical progression from the general overview to specific country-by-country analysis. - Cohesive devices (e.g., 'Meanwhile', 'By contrast', 'whereas', 'respectively') are used naturally and effectively to link ideas and data points. - Referencing and substitution (e.g., 'this position', 'this field') are used accurately, making the message effortless to follow.

Lexical Resource - 9

- The response demonstrates a wide and sophisticated range of vocabulary used with precision (e.g., 'primary source', 'dominant field', 'a mere', 'accounting for'). - Lexical items are used naturally and with an awareness of academic style and collocation. - Spelling and word formation are flawless throughout the response.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 9

- A wide range of complex structures is used with full flexibility and accuracy (e.g., 'with figures... standing at', 'although... agriculture remains...'). - Sentences are consistently error-free, demonstrating a high level of grammatical control. - Punctuation is used correctly and enhances the clarity of the comparisons.

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